A commentary should convey your opinion, so don't be afraid to use the personal voice - "I feel that...", "I think that..." are all valid statements to use.
Note the rubric used for the assessment (I will be passing this to your class soon) - predicting a counter-argument (for your opinion) and rebutting it is expected. For a good score, the following structure is suggested for your essay.
Introductory Paragraph
-Motivator
-Thesis Statement
-Blueprint
Body Paragraph #1 (Argument)
-Topic Sentence
-Specific Support
-Evidence
-Explanation of Evidence
Body Paragraph #2 (Rebuttal)
-State possible counter-argument to your thesis statement)
-Explain this counter-argument
-Topic Sentence (refute the counter-argument)
-Specific Support
-Evidence
-Explanation of Evidence
Concluding Paragraph
-Reworded Thesis Statement
-Clincher
Hello Mr. Tan,
ReplyDeleteCan you look through my commentary? My register number is 17.
Thank you and have a nice day.
Shaw Shiuan